Draft of Whispering Magic
In the heart of an ancient, whispering forest stood a grove where moonlight danced among the silver leaves. Here, the unicorns grazed under the shimmering light, their hooves making no sound on the mossy ground. Amidst them, a young human girl named Elara wandered, her eyes wide with wonder and fear.
Elara had heard tales of the enchanted forest from her grandmother's stories. She believed in fairies who weaved rainbows and dragons who guarded hidden treasures. Tonight, she sought to prove these myths were real. As she ventured deeper into the woods, the trees bent lower, inviting her to follow their whispering.
A sudden rustle made Elara turn. A small creature with wings as delicate as spider webs fluttered towards her-she recognized it immediately as a fairy, the smallest of all mythical beings. The fairy's name was Lila, and she held a glowing seed in one hand.
'Come, Elara,' Lila said, her voice soft yet commanding. 'The magic of our forest can only be seen by those pure at heart.'
Together, they moved through the glade where flowers bloomed with patterns that shimmered like starlight. A gentle breeze carried them to a clearing where a great dragon lay asleep, its scales glittering under the moonlight.
Elara approached cautiously, her heart pounding with excitement and trepidation. The dragon stirred but did not wake, allowing Elara to touch one of its scales gently. It felt like ice but was surprisingly warm, sending a tingling sensation through her fingers.
Draft Review of Whispering Magic
This draft is a great start! The setting and characters are well-developed. However, there are a few areas that could be improved for better flow and clarity.
1. Elara's interaction with Lila could be more detailed. Adding some dialogue or descriptions of how Lila's wings felt might enhance the scene.
2. Consider elaborating on the appearance of the dragon to make it more vivid. A few descriptive phrases about its size, shape, and behavior would bring the creature to life.
3. The ending feels a bit abrupt. You could add a line or two that ties everything together nicely, perhaps Elara learning something important from her experience.