Draft of Power's Awakening
In the heart of an ancient forest, under the shadow of towering trees, young Elric stumbled upon a forgotten clearing. A glinting object lay hidden beneath a layer of moss. As he picked up the ornate, rune-covered artifact, his world began to shift. The air grew thick with power as the relic spoke directly into his mind, promising untold abilities in exchange for a great sacrifice.
Draft Review of Power's Awakening
The draft has a good hook with Elric discovering an artifact. However, the flow could be improved by showing more of his reaction to the relic before it starts speaking. Consider adding descriptive details about the clearing or Elric's surroundings to enhance atmosphere. The sacrifice concept might need better elaboration for clarity.